Dream_land
Hello author San... UR story has potential.. And u have a imaginative.. Mind. UR story is.. Good, hooked the readers.. Sink into world of fantasy u create... A magic.. And mermaid blessing.. Concept is new.. I LIKE UR STORY very much.. BUT U BADLY IN NEED OF A PROOF READER AND EDITOR.. AND BEHIND Every Original novel success is A Fixed Chapter Release Shedule AND the story is pacing forward not going round and round in circles.. Good luckđđđđ
I cant believe my eyes. They have read a masterpiece. Omo writer, you have done a great job. Imma envy your writing now. I sense a lot of emotions and feelings you depicted in novel. I loveeeeee it. There are no words to describe my feelings when J read it. Your book is worth reading. Highly recommended.
First of all, I love how you describe your world background. It's so detailed that induces us, readers, to picture out what the world really looks like in your story. The characters too, well portrayed if I may say. Now, for the critic, I'd rather suggest you proofread the chapters. The thought is there, the flow is there. But sometimes, these ideas are either chunk, misspelled, or unrelatedly joined together in a sentence which makes us, readers, confused. But, if you fix that, I'm sure this story will come out splendidly than it already is! I commend you for your work author! Great job!
This story is really my type of genre so I really love this. I would say that every story has an ending but not everyone happy to their ending and that's the reality of life. But when it comes to fiction, you have the power to give a happy ending. So this story is very great! I hope more chapters to come.
I sense that you are one imaginative person. As I read your first few chapters, I can see that you're trying very hard to be as descriptive as possible. The amount of effort you put in this is commendable. Your novel seems very interesting too, I'm hooked. Though, we can't deny that there are plenty of grammatical and spelling errors. Some paragraphs are just difficult to read because of the mistakes. If you have time, you should go back to your chapters and do a bit of editing here and there. If you do fix your errors then I know, your story will come to be wonderful. Good job to the author! Keep updating <3
I am interested in this book. The details are all on point and I can understand it clearly. The only feedback I can give you for your book is to fix some grammar and punctuation here and there. Once you fix that everything should be perfect! I would definitely recommend this book to everyone who is interested in a female lead!!