Reviews of I Received System to Become Dragonborn

The story had potential but the author made all the characters brain dead. In the battle against the unicorn riders the so called elite troops, the MC fights against them, and kills most of them by simply blocking their vision and stabbing them and their Elite troops? Even if they couldn't personal defend themselves, your telling me that the don't have the teamwork necessary to block an attack for their comrade? And as an army commander, you believed that an ordinary soldier fought off elven troops that almost killed your entire squad, walked away practically unharmed and you don't suspect anything? And now the elven princess, she told her enemy when her soldiers would attack, (putting aside the fact that our MC readily believed her), and has the power to talk to MC from like another dimension but can't even defend herself when the MC rushes her? It makes no sense that whoever taught her magic didn't even teach she common spells like magic shield and magic missile

THIS BOOK WOULD BE GRATE IF IT DIDNT GO BACK AND FORTH BETWEEN WORLDS!! ITS DEFINITELY DIFFERENT BUT I JUST DONT LIKE HOW ALL OF THIS OS GOING ON!! AND HONESTLY THE MC SHOULD DIE AND GO TO THERE WORLD AS A HUMAN AND THEN START TO CHANGE AND ALL THAT THIS MAKES IT INTERESTING BUT FOR ME IT JUST DOESNT FEEL RIGHT... I LIKE IT BUT I DONT AT THE SAME TIME ITS REAL HARD TO EXPLAIN!! I HOPE Y CAN COME OUT WITH ANOTHER BOOK WHERE THE PERSON FINDS SO CRACK IN SPACE ON THERE OWN WORLD AND GOSE THROUGH OR IT EVEN IN A CAVE AND AS HE GOSE THROUGH HE GETS TO TALK TO GODS AND GODDESSES AND TELLS THEM THAT HE DOESNT WANT TO BE A WEAK HUMAN ANY MORE THAT THE HUMAN RACE SHOULD DIE BUT THEY ALL KNOW HOW MUCH HE HAS BEEN THROUGH THATS Y HES ALLOWED TO GO THROUGH THE PASSAGE AND ALL THAT AND HAVE HIM BE REBORN AS A REALLY SMALL KID MAYBE NOT A BABY BUT A SMALL KID TO WHERE HE CAN BOND WOTH THE FAMILY AND MAKE IT HIS OWN AT SOME POINT AND THIS HE CAN GET POWERS WITH THE SYSTEMS HELP AND HAVE HIM GET POWERS LIKE LIKE THE DRAGON AND LIKE IN THIS BOOK SLOWLY BUT HAVE HIM GET OTHER AND EVEN HAVE HIM GET A BEAST TAMING POWER THIS WAY EVEN WITH OUT A CONTRACT HE CAN HAVE ALL THE BEAST LISTEN TO HIM AND HE WOULD ONLY MAKE A CONTRACT WITH THE STRONGEST OF RACES THIS WAY HE CAN HAVE ALL PERSON GUARDS THAT R THE STRONGEST FROM THERE RACE AND HE CAN EVEN HELP THEM BECAUSE STRONGER AND AFTER THAT HER CAN FALL FOR A PRINCESS OR BUILD HIS OWN KINGDOME OR FIGHT IN A TOURNAMENT FOR A PRINCESS OR HAVE HIM BUILD A KINGDOME WHERE HE GETS ALL OF THE MONEY FOR IT AND RESOURCES HAVE HIM STEAL THEM FOR OTHER KINGDOMES AND NO ONE CAN SEE HIM BECAUSE ITS ONE OF HIS ABILITIES AND HAVE HIM FIND TREASURE TOMBS AND SO ON AND THIS WAY HE WILL HAVE ENOUGH OF EVERYTHING AND LET HIM FIND A PLACE BETWEEN 2 OF THE STRONGEST KINGDOMES OR HAVE HIM FIND A PLACE WHERE PEOPLE DONT LIKE TO GO ON THE OUTSKIRTS OF A PIECE OF LAND AND HAVE HIM BUILD OT THERE AND ONE ITS BUILT HE CAN FIGHT IN THE TOURNAMENT AND WIN AND MAKE HIS KINGDOME KNOWN AND HE CAN GET A PRINCESS BUT HAVE MIH NOT FORCE HER HE CAN TAKE HIS TIME TO GET TO KNOW HER AND ALL THAT AND MAYBE HAVE HIM FIGJT IN OTHER TOURNAMENTS TO GET OTHER PRINCESS TO PUT PRESSURE ON THE OTHERS 1 OR 1S TO EITHER STAY OR GO OR THEY CAN ALL STAY AND HIS KINGDOME CAN THRIVE HAVE HIM HAVE HIS HAND IN MANY BUSINESS TO BECOME EVEN RICHER AND HAVE A POERT CITY THE BIGGEST ONE EVER THIS WAY IT BECOMES THE BIGGEST PLACE FOR SHIPS TO COME IN AND OFF LOAF AND LOAD THERE RESOURCES TO HIS KINGDOME THIS WAY HE CAN THRIVE EVEN MORE AND HAVE HIS KINGDOME KINDA IN A HIGH PLACE TO HAVE A NICE SCENERY SO PEOPLE WILL WANT TO GO SEE SOMETHING BEAUTIFUL BUT ALSO HAVE A SAFE PLACE BECAUSE IT WOULD BE HARD FOR ARMYS TO GET UP THERE AND HE CAN HAVE OTHER CITYS DOWN THE MOUNTAIN OR A VERY BUG HILL SO THIS WAY THERE SAFTT CHECKPOINTS AND HAVE THE MOUNTAIN NOT BE SUPPER COLD BUT NOT SUPPER HIT ITS RIGHT ALL YEAR FOR THE MOST PART IT WILL DROP AND RISE A LITTLE BUT IT WILL BE MANAGEABLE AND MAYBE HAVE HIM FIND IT WHEN HE IS GROWING UP LOOKING FOR TREASURE TOMBS AND WORKING FOR THE GUILD BUT ITS JUST AN IDEA AND WOULD REALLY LOVE IT TO COME TO LIFE IF POSSIBLE WITHOUT IT BEING TO MUCH OR TO LITTLE AND NOT HAVE IT NOT FEEL RIGHT OR WRONG LIKE THIS BOOK ITS JUST SO CONFUSING ON HOW TO EXPLAIN THIS BOOK... ITS GOOD AND HAS GOOD POTENTIAL BUT JUST FEELS LIKE ITS CONFUSING OR THE FEELING ISNT RIGHT IDK LIKE I SAID ITS CONFUSING TO PUT IN WORDS... BUT I HOPE U KEEP GOING WITH UR BOOK!! AND DONT MIND THE CAPS MY PHONE IS BROKE!

I haven’t read yet but I’m commenting cause I’m 90% sure there was another author that got their novel taken down after using ZeniMax properties. The term Dragonborn is almost directly related to Elder Scrolls. Idk if author knew this, but it might be better to use different vocabulary. Synopsis looks really interesting though.

Im not sure if I'm qualified to be reviewing this, having only read the 40 free chapters, but I need to write reviews for my badge so here goes anyway. This book has potential. Or at least it did up until I stopped. The problem came with consistent boughts of contradictory statements by both characters and author, as well as these characters having personalities I would never believe to exist even if they were in my most realistic dreams(leading to a 2-star for character development). For one the MC and his military buddies have fought together for 5 years and yet he still acts like a complete idiot when it comes to anything to do with fighting, be it technique, tactics, mentality, discipline, or anything else. And by idiot, I don't mean average civilian idiot- I mean worse than probably 80 percent of the general population. And then there's the dementia. Why does everyone just forget everything? The MC even forgot to do his daily quests!! His only true way to get stronger, which is the best way to solve all of his problems up until now!! Not up to date, so updating stability is 5 stars. World background is nothing special, but decently well executed up to paid chapters start. I think that's all I want to say. If I want to add anything I'll reply to this review.

pretty good. Should have used Dovahzul tho but u know just saying

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This novel was awfully written. The characters' interaction with one another feels fake, and the fight scene is just terrible and brain-dead.

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