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you are very good at writing. No amount of words can describe it. I have to say first that I am not good at writing reviews for romance novels, but here I go. So far so good. I only wished it kind of steered away from the cliche rich guy meets poor girl, but who knows. Maybe the development will take turn for a better surprise. If you are into romance, then This is a good read. It reminds me of watching good quality k-drama. keep it up!
Great story, solid writing, steady updates, and awesome development. If you are looking for an enjoyable story, you've got one here. The advice I would give is to add more description regarding what the characters look like. Perhaps during that first interaction describe how they dress or how they are dressed (it makes for good immersion). Describe the setting and background a bit more. Describe what people see to make the world feel more real. Describe the sky, the grass or desert sand, something or anything to put someone in that scene. You could describe what someone smells. Maybe it smells good like cinnamon because an older lady has freshly baked cinnabons outside. Maybe it smells like rotten sewage outside. You can describe how someone smells. Perhaps a woman has a vanilla cranberry perfume sprayed across her body. Maybe a man's breath smells like old garlic. Hope you get the gist, I don't think description is used as much as I'd like in 90 percent of webnovels but it's only my two cents. If done right it can enhance a story, though some people overdo it (maybe like me). It is a stylistic preference how much is needed but I think every writer should try different forms of narrative description at times. The lore background and setting is nice. The author does a good job laying that out from early on. Hope you appreciated my feedback, you are also welcome to check out my works. Cheers.
Needs more build up in world, background and characters. Sorry but in what place would a daughter of a Minister of Education be treated like this? Any other time unless they are unloved this wouldn't happen. She is adored by her Minister father. No way would a principal be able to treat a superintendent this way.
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