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Comments of chapter undefined of ARC-77 (Fordo)

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CosmicSkyNet
CosmicSkyNetLv13CosmicSkyNet

Ok, the chapter is ok but could have been better, my thing here is that the the entire feels kinda robotic and there isn’t any life/ personality, the mc is just following his ‘program’ there is no questions about anything, he hasn’t gave his thoughts about being in another universe, fighting in a war where he can potentially die in it, he just simply acts that he is another clone, not a man who died and reincarnated into a clone but just another clone. The writing is also another thing everything is undescriptive (imo) it doesn’t write about what he does on his time on the cruiser or gave a description of what the mc see, feel, hear, or smell it’s just he gets on cruiser goes to admiral ask how long to planet “4hours” ok and then he waits…see what I’m trying to get at? There is not description or text to put it short. Thank you

Scott47
Scott47AuthorScott47

no problem

CosmicSkyNet:I would say keep writing and use this fic as a way to get better and experiment a little bit as well 👍 Thank you for taking the feedback well
Brezer
BrezerLv14Brezer

chapters are really short, not enough to get involved with before it's over

Finnish_man
Finnish_manLv4Finnish_man

Good chap