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Characterization in the beginnings is pretty bad especially in this chapter. With great intellect comes photographic memory as well as old memories, yet Mc continues to act like, I love my parents, I enjoy these new parents, go to work, never see your son, I completely understand.... yet forgets that they will die soon by canon timeline. That's not how someone who supposedly loves their parents should be acting if you know their gonna die... unless you forgot, yet you remember useless school information? Full of holes in this chapter.
TftC. MC should've thought about It sooner as Original Peter's Parents also dies when he was 4 Years Old. Also,If MC couldn't save them then at least he should've asked for Money,I mean Peter grows up in Poverty as Uncle Ben was too Poor and too honest to ever become reach,so MC should've make his parents give Uncle Ben and Aunt May his Life Support Money so that he could grow up Properly,I mean Peter's parents are scientists,so don't have enough money for Peter to grow up in a little bit of luxury and Not poverty?
I know that fanfic authors cling to canon because they aren’t creative enough to reimagine the story should they flap their little 🦋 wings and 🌪️ make any substantial change… but I think they miss the biggest incentive for creating the story in the first place. We read these stories because we like the original works, we see the characters live out a tough life and we want to make it better. We see the villains cause tragedies and we see how inefficiently they receive their karmic comeuppance. We don’t just want to see a remix of the original. This is doubly true when the MC is given vast amounts of power yet they fail to make any meaningful difference because… PLOT. If I was reborn into this situation and I had four coherent years to think about the future… I would not have allowed things to progress in this manner. Honestly, even if I was a fool like the MC and I never made any plans to counter this emergency I know I could have resolved it by breaking the rules and revealing a little of my secrets. Considering his mind is one of the best in Marvel, I think his silence could be interpreted as him giving up on his parents rather than unveiling his mystery.
ugh, the abuse from his previous life was practically shoved down my throat, f**king cringe. I can barely digest it. Being smart, yet being unable to save his parents, f**king pathetic. I mean, it's obvious they aren't going to take his words seriously, you're a crying mess, they'd probably, no, Definitely think that he just doesn't want them to leave. Was tears the only solution to save his parent he could think of? besides if he did manage to stop his parents from leaving, what next? hide in the house, under the bed?
At one year old he was already reading and understanding biology books. Are you sure this freak is human? Children generally start walking around one year old, a little less than that or perhaps a little more. Creating this protagonist who has severe trauma due to abusive parents doesn't seem like a good idea to me, especially when you put him in the place of Peter Parker, who has good but absent parents, not to mention that he usually loses his parents early in childhood and his uncle as a teenager. I didn't really like it so far.