TheEndlessAbyss
Did anyone else notice the abrupt change in perspective? From one to the other, just like that, it went from the protagonist's perspective, from his internal thoughts, to a third-person perspective. There wasn't even a warning, it just happened. I tried not to think too much about writing the story, believing that the plot and development of the story could make up for it and that the writer will improve with time, but it's kind of hard to let go after seeing a brutal mistake like that.