Comments of chapter undefined of The Immortal (twilight fanfiction)

Thanks for the chapter. I hope you maintain your motivation to write. so far this is a very good Twilight fanfic. I like the idea of ​​an immortal character who spans the ages. it's a change from classic fanfic

I like the story keep going

if I can add 2/3 idea, it could be interesting to see the mc cross eras like the founding of the Greco/Roman empire, the Mongolian empire or etc... Watch him try to defeat the Romanian clan by founding an opposing empire. Otherwise among the species there are also werewolves (which are different from the metamorph) and which were hunted to extinction by the volturi.

Good and I hope you make the mc go to all the wonders of the world. And the ones that don’t exist anymore, like Colossus of Rhodes, Great Pyramid of Giza, Hanging Gardens of Babylon, Statue of Zeus at Olympia, Temple of Artemis at Ephesus, Mausoleum at Halicarnassus, and Lighthouse of Alexandria. You can do a quick google search for them. And he can learn how to play music

Like it please do more of this story and hope you have a great day

I’m honestly glad for the rewrite. Guy took 1000 years to figure out that he may need to know how to fight against vampires? He saves a town knowing that the vampires will retaliate by attacking several towns and killing twice the number he rescued. Wants a Japanese sword but does not go to japan to get one. Ok that last one was maybe a passing thought. But you get my point. Dude fought hundreds of bandits and was still surprised that he had to fight a vamp. Smdh

It's okay to rewrite as long as you feel comfortable

Me gusta tu historia, sigue con el buen trabajo

no worries my friend love your story still.

Oooh.. Look at this unpolished gem I've found... No worries, we can wait

Hey whatever you feel you need to do.Personally I didn't mind them too much and I can be pretty critical of silly/bad aspects of a novels.

Broo don't stoop, please update update Update update

dang, I caught up to the newest chapter... I'm really liking this story so far. I'm still waiting for Daniel to hear exaggerated tales about himself while traveling XD.

Edit: this whole chap felt stilted (lol, sry had to do it XD). Also, still true though, so keep this in mind when writing: this chap, even if it's only a note, perfectly shows what to avoid when writing anything descriptive; in this chap most the problems I've had w/your current style were magnified: i.e., stilted writing, lack of period, and too many paragraphs with too little filling/writing (though this is mainly due to me reading on laptop and not mobile, which is a less cramped reading experience). If you keep these aspects in mind when writing, you'll improve your future chaps by leaps and bounds.

It's been 9 days since Bean posted a chapter kind of suspicious

Thanks for the heads up buddy. I hope it turns out to your satisfaction and though it can be hit and miss I'm eager to keep reading.

Please don’t drop keep up the good work.

Please sire fellow author update your truly kingly book of books

when is the new chapter?

Thanks for the chapter