Passerby_Venne
Honestly, the idea for this fanfic was good, I loved how you made it so that his future knowledge wouldn't interfere with the course of the story, but this guilt that Asafa feels seems very forced, I know you want to do something more dramatic and impactful but It's poorly done, he didn't have all his memories to have a credible reason to disobey scar, his instincts warned him but he was still inexperienced, his excessive self-blame is not justified, I'm going to keep reading this story because I really liked it, especially the oc's like Ayana and Imani, but if you're going to rewrite this story I recommend looking for another reason for him to stay away from home.
author-sam, you could make the world's spiritual energy return, allowing animals to evolve traits or even evolve into a higher species, you could make a world without humans where each animal would create its own kingdom or government, where the stronger and more evolved, they would have a better social position, it would be incredible (I was sorry for the grammar, I used Google translate to write this)