Comments of chapter undefined of HOTD: Tōshiro Nagi

I have quite a bit of criticism regarding your writing style and harem thing. First, your writing style is good, but not perfect. From your writing, it becomes obvious that you haven’t truly grasped the advanced concept of grammer in English. I found some sentences fragments and incorrect use of punctuations sometimes. BUT, I still like this story. Considering this is a fanfic and not your top priority, it is still amazing. Not many people can write a story with good imagination and creativity. Consider using grammer corrector softwares like Grammarly. Now about the harem: Saeko and Saya are the only ones I think would be interesting. Adding more people in harem would make this story quite hard to follow. Final thoughts, this is all my opinion. I MIGHT BE WRONG OR NOT, but please do not get offended. No hate!

although the mc shows sociopathic tendencies he still has principles that he follows. I think an interesting angle to follow, as a framework for nagi's development, would be something along the lines of: he was born very intelligent, intelligent enough to see the degradation and hypocrisy of society from a young age. this in turn makes him give up on other people and just look out for himself. so, the apocalypse is seen as just another hurdle, but as time passes he begins to realize that he can build a new life and worthwhile relationships now that old and decayed society has fallen. I think he would generally act the same, but would begin to value his close group highly and protect what he sees as his new chance at life viciously.

I understand he is showing empathy again but don't overdo it and make him a softie, just empathize with those in your circle and be cold to the rest. It doesn't matter if it's a harem or not, I'd rather it wasn't because it's more likely and easier to write well, as long as it's well written it's ok.

Thanks for the story. Do not make him into pushover.

hey bro I don't have no clue what's going on I haven't heard of that word before no clue. I honestly like how you're taking your time making this you're putting a lot of effort on the story it's good and enjoyable to be honest this is the first story I actually put my power Stones to please keep up the hard work.

yep i think Nagi should have a harem but do not let the harem consume your story like many other great fics where its starts off with Saeko and the Nurse and then boom we have like Sci-fi elements and then boom 50 other girls Because the MC was the only Man who was nice in their life it should stay grounded in reality just because MC is nice to other girls and looks good doesnt mean he has to get with other girls just because have they a like first sight crush on him doesnt mean they can force their way into the Harem. Yeah like He is in a Harem so its okey to have more girls because his capable yeah no Saeko should defend their Relationship with a Katana well its just my opinion and its ur story have a good day!

Gracias por el capítulo

Personally, I find the story good so far, Nagi has been a little over the top but that’s good also. I like the Triage X look into his personality. 2 or just 3 if going harem, more than that just seems way to far fetched. Saeko being number 1 is a must just because character development between the two can be both a little playful but also bloody. The rest of the harem is up to you on how you want the story to go. Honestly in HOTD Rika Minami has always been my favorite second girl behind Saeko. Her story could be fleshed out just the same as Saeko a little teasing and bloody. This would make it easy to understand why the harem got to be and could get Shizuka believable into the mix later. Just my two sense and it’s your story write how you want. I am here for the ride as long you don’t drop or go off the deep end.

I personally think it would be better if something like this happened over time, bit by bit so that it feels more natural, since a sudden realization is just a little rushed. Though his thoughts in this chapter could be used for after said changes happen.

Okey time to review. I personally like harem so if you want do it, fine by me. But as a reader you would have a hard time implementing a harem with how the MC is (character and how he acts i mean). This is not meant to discourage you but as you said you dont want it to be forced and the mc strikes me the kind of guy to stay with one. In summary, if author and majority wants a harem then fine by me if not still fine by me.

Rei in the harem!!!

Did your mc come from the white room lol he reminds me of ayanokoji