Comments of chapter undefined of The Forsaken Sovereign

Ummm authour, your writing is great but I think your paragraphs are too long, for new readers I think you should split up your sentences so it’s not too daunting for them. Great work by the way.

Thanks for the chapter!

Tftc

Thanks for the chapter, from what I’ve read this is pretty good, there’s no grammar issues and has a nice opening. I think it has a lot of potential based on this.

Thanks for the chapter

Tftc

Thanks for the chapter

Tftc

Thanks for the good chapter 👍🏼

Thanks for the chapter Author 🙂

I hope he does try to save his sister or it kinda makes the whole beginning and earth personality pointless, I mean the personality merge makes sense but his entire earth personality was doing everything he could to protect and support his mother and sister now that he’s in another world and she’s going to suffer a horrible life he’s like “whatevs ain’t like that’s my problem anymore.” It just doesn’t make sense. I think it would have been better if both of them died because then at least he wouldn’t be throwing aside his family to suffer.

Nice chap ✨

Nice chap ✨

thanks for the chapter