ricebucket0_0
Great starting! I love how descriptive this is. It really sucks you in.
Good chapter, but dialogue problems. It is not clear who is speaking when.
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Interesting enough to hook me! good job![img=recommend]
Incredibly interesting start đâ´ď¸
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