Comments of chapter undefined of Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)

Thanks for another excellent chapter, I’m a little excited to see what he can do with a thing from The World Serpent.

TYFTC

great chapter eagerly waiting for the next chapter

Thanks for the chapter.

Thanks for chapter

Well that vision was a bit ominous but not that bad all things considered. So I'm still hoping she's a good mum to Harry. 🙏

So Lily has bad intentions towards Harry? Well, who would have thought

Thanks for the chapter

Really feels like Harry's being dumb down. The whole vision about Lily's should of been a huge red flag, and yet he dismisses it because of a single past interaction. It's foolish. You overwrite far too much. Honestly, anything that isn't adding value needs to be cut. This whole chapter was basically one massive waste of time, it could of easily been cut down into a paragraph or 2 without missing any essential information. A lot of your chapters are like this, just a lot of filler content that adds nothing to the story. The narrative is hindered massively because of this. Things that could of been resolved much quicker are taking dozens of chapters when they only need half as much. Read a few books (I mean actual books not fanfiction) and you'll notice how much cleaner they are to read because of the lack of random exposition or philosophical tangents that don't add to anything.

thanks for the chapter!~

Merci pour le chapitre !