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  • Alfiemooon
    Alfiemooon1d
    Replied to Kenny123

    I do it all the time lol. It's why I used ADHD as an example.

    Am I being dramatic? Maybe. But don't judge me. I know that my life isn't as bad as many others', so I won't complain too much.
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    I Stream DC on Marvel
    Anime & Comics · Mr_Aizen
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  • Alfiemooon
    Alfiemooon4d
    Replied to Raptor2244

    what made you think lily kept harry alive out love. There could be loads going on we don't know about. for example, maybe she needed somebody of her blood that was magical, her appearing rn and having being knowledgeable on blood magic could of been foreshadowing to that. Or perhaps the purpose of the spell wasn't to save harry, but it done that accidentally because he was Lily's blood. You're making assumptions that are going to leave you disappointed.

    The woman did not answer the question, "Still, quite remarkable. I never expected anyone your age to keep up with me, even if I'm holding back a lot. After all, killing you would be… regretful."
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    Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)
    Book&Literature · athass_prkr
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  • Alfiemooon
    Alfiemooon4d
    Replied to Raptor2244

    Yes! literally everyone wanted them to he enemies.

    Ch 256 Chapter 256: Mother and Son
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    Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)
    Book&Literature · athass_prkr
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  • Alfiemooon
    Alfiemooon12d
    Replied to Brutality

    it's "have I been kidnapped?" or "was I kidnapped?".

    'Am I kidnapped by some alien civilization or something?'
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    Marvel: I Need A New Body
    Anime & Comics · Marveller
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  • Alfiemooon
    Alfiemooon12d
    Replied to

    The author used present tense.

    'Am I kidnapped by some alien civilization or something?'
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    Marvel: I Need A New Body
    Anime & Comics · Marveller
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  • Alfiemooon
    Alfiemooon13d
    Commented

    Can harry maybe, possibly win without getting caught or outplayed because he was "too cocky" or something. The whole story loop we've been in has gotten so repetitive.

    AN: So the tournament finally begins. I'm so excited about this arc. I have something special planned on that front. As usual, please let me know what you think or if you have any suggestions.
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    Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)
    Book&Literature · athass_prkr
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  • Alfiemooon
    Alfiemooon15d
    Replied to Alfiemooon

    feels weird harry wouldn't notice a new teacher with arcane hearing

    The transfiguration mistress waited a good minute for the cheers to go out and continued, "The delegates will have the opportunity to learn from every institution they visit and I certainly hope that they would do Hogwarts proud," there was an undertone of threat at the idea of them embarrassing the school and more than a few people gulped, "They will also be accompanied by a single staff member to supervise them, which will switch after each task. In the meantime, their classes will be taught by a temporary replacement to make sure that your education is not affected in any way. I will be the first supervisor in the tournament as Headmasters are required to attend the opening ceremony and I will return after the first task which will take place in a couple of weeks. Until then, our dear Professor Flitwick will become the acting headmaster, and my transfiguration classes will be covered by Professor Matilda Sharp."
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    Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)
    Book&Literature · athass_prkr
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  • Alfiemooon
    Alfiemooon15d
    Commented

    lily?

    The transfiguration mistress waited a good minute for the cheers to go out and continued, "The delegates will have the opportunity to learn from every institution they visit and I certainly hope that they would do Hogwarts proud," there was an undertone of threat at the idea of them embarrassing the school and more than a few people gulped, "They will also be accompanied by a single staff member to supervise them, which will switch after each task. In the meantime, their classes will be taught by a temporary replacement to make sure that your education is not affected in any way. I will be the first supervisor in the tournament as Headmasters are required to attend the opening ceremony and I will return after the first task which will take place in a couple of weeks. Until then, our dear Professor Flitwick will become the acting headmaster, and my transfiguration classes will be covered by Professor Matilda Sharp."
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    Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)
    Book&Literature · athass_prkr
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  • Alfiemooon
    Alfiemooon15d
    Replied to Mahbub2001

    that's exactly what I want to happen lol. she's a loose end that needs to be deal that with before Harry can get on the Dumbledore issue.

    "I believe it's time for me to meet my son," the redhead answered ominously.
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    Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)
    Book&Literature · athass_prkr
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  • Alfiemooon
    Alfiemooon18d
    Replied to Jake_Kloiber

    there's only one.

    "Welcome. To Yharnam," I intoned softly, my voice barely a whisper but still carrying to everyone's ears. "A dream and nightmare in its own right. And the home of the Bloodborne Hunt…"
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    Gotham's Dead End Bar
    Anime & Comics · Daddy
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  • Alfiemooon
    Alfiemooon25d
    Replied to orstedssama

    we don't actually know if she wants to harm harry in any way. She hasn't given us any indication she'll do so, However, she's allied with people who harry are antagonist against; if she does try to harm him, it would be because of those allies.

    Ch 243 Chapter 243: Broken Secrets
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    Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)
    Book&Literature · athass_prkr
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  • Alfiemooon
    Alfiemooon25d
    Replied to ShuYme

    AI makes everything so much worse tbh. Anybody who touches it for any sort of art form loses my respect. Don't cover up your incompetence with something heavily flawed, that's just asking for a mess of a story.

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    Naruto The Shadow King (Dropped)
    Anime & Comics · kamidemond
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  • Alfiemooon
    Alfiemooon25d
    Replied to Blake_Silver

    punctuation is the least of it. Either way, it's blatent and terrible to read. it's bad. Just because there are worse things out there, that doesn't make this good. it's cat shit vs dog shit. They're different, doesn't mean one is better than the other.

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    Oh No, I get stuck with Crazy Name that Stuck me with A crazy Goddess!
    Anime & Comics · RikuKage
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  • Alfiemooon
    Alfiemooon27d
    Replied to Abadom

    but 80% of the chapter was random trash dialogue. Cut it out and nothing changes. your chapters just aren't long enough to sustain a chapter that has so much filler. It means we have to sometimes read up to 5 chapters just for something to happen, that's ridiculously bad.

    Ch 282 Family Reunion Part 2
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    In Danmachi with Plasmids
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  • Alfiemooon
    Alfiemooon27d
    Commented

    A lot of filler dialogue here. Most of the contents of most of the chapters could be completely cut and it wouldn't of made a difference. the author needs to be more considerate about what they write. A lot of the time it's just stuff that belongs in the background. A chapter should advance the plot in someway, or at least set up a plot advancement nicely. Your chapters fail to do this and it makes reading your story tedious. I could skip dozens of chapters at a time and usually not miss anything important. I think you just stretch your arcs out too far. realistically it shouldn't take any more than 15-20 chapters to finish an arc.

    Ch 282 Family Reunion Part 2
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    In Danmachi with Plasmids
    Anime & Comics · Abadom
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  • Alfiemooon
    Alfiemooon27d
    Commented

    I hope harry keeps lily away from him. We really don't need a "bad parent not really bad, eventually dies to save child" trope. it's way too cliche and lily would serve much better as a constant villain.

    Ch 243 Chapter 243: Broken Secrets
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    Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)
    Book&Literature · athass_prkr
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  • Alfiemooon
    Alfiemooon1mth
    Commented

    "are... are you an adventurer"* You don't start a question with you. It's just grammatically wrong 🤷‍♂️

    "Y-You… Are you an adventurer?" 
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    In Danmachi with Plasmids
    Anime & Comics · Abadom
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  • Alfiemooon
    Alfiemooon1mth
    Commented

    yes? The Hera and Zeus familia, iirc, only managed to destroy a single scale or something like that. They were completely decimated by the dragon.

    Would the black Dragon even shed its scales naturally?...
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    In Danmachi with Plasmids
    Anime & Comics · Abadom
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  • Alfiemooon
    Alfiemooon1mth
    Commented

    It's hard to imagine Zeus just happening across that many molted scales.

    Buried deep within the ground, I noticed there were scales from the One-Eyed Black Dragon hidden from everyone's eyes.
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    In Danmachi with Plasmids
    Anime & Comics · Abadom
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  • Alfiemooon
    Alfiemooon1mth
    Commented

    surprised at what? it's a world with magic In, most people know it exists. There really shouldn't be any sort of surprise.

    'Silver was slightly surprised as he looked at the young man, but as he saw his hands and clothes, he came to a silent understanding...'
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    In Danmachi with Plasmids
    Anime & Comics · Abadom
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