Zero_writer
come on man he was working towards buying the potion for 2 years but still doesn't know the price. and you should give more context about the general value of cores of different ranks first instead of just rushing forward. It's really rushed chapters at first. U didn't write important stuff but wrote about him buying the potion. who cares about his interaction. you can develop your character later. You should have thought about what you were going to write or read some similar stories so you would have known not to make mistakes. Why would everyone know about him man. Do you think they do anything to do. If they are learning how to fight. all academy novels have the same stereotypes. Just first read some other novels so you would know what not write