Demons_and_I
Nice chapter. I like the battle, but perhaps try to add a few more adjectives? For example, liked how you put "gutteral laughter". It tells me how he laughed, therfore how he felt. There were a few others too, but I wasn't quite drawn into the fight scene. Maybe it just might be me. I do see that you have descriptives of the scene, but it was more of a, "he did this and then this and then the other guy did that" sort of description. Again, probably just me but I like the adjectives the descriptions, the details that tell me and make me feel how the MC is feeling. Instead of just telling, try to paint the picture for the reader. You did every now and then, but also try a little more for the fight scenes. Like how the did the blood pool or drench his clothes, or perhaps the how he felt the warmth of his own blood seeping through his clothes etc. Hopefully I made sense.