Alright my phone isn’t letting me do this in paragraphs so a bunch of corrections are coming. I’ll only do this for the first chapter though. Be aware that I’ll likely be re writing it just without the grammar issues that are glaring at me
annnd done... the grammar is very rough. I apologize for all the corrections but at 1am when i usually sleep at 10pm it seemed like a good idea. You have a decent starting premise so just roll with the hits and move on. Good luck!