Comments of chapter undefined of Beast Evolution

For now the novel is very interesting, but there are some things that should be changed to make the reading more 'comfortable'. First of all, don't repeat the character name several times in a single paragraph, You can replace 'ray' with 'he' or even slightly change the phrase so you don't have to point out a character. Also, you can put " or ' to indicate speech or thoughts respectively, thus making the reading more fluid. (It is quite annoying to have to read twice a paragraph to know what is a speech/thought and what a narration). Thank you for your time.

enjoying the flow so far, makes me want to know more about this world and rays adventure in it

Hey author, how about not repeating the ending paragraph as the next chapters beginning paragraph? If this is a writing tool you are using, please change it. Thank you

Strong boss

Hey Author so is the title picture what we look like

1 point I usually notice in novels is that a spear is used to slash, but a spear is used to pierce instead... well maybe a fantasy spear does that?

slow down. "more harder to evolve" should have been even harder not more.... your choices in words n punctuation is making it more harder to like n follow this story.

can he go back to first dungeon and kill the boss or is he locked out?

like how it's developing so far

so far I'm enjoying it waiting to see the ending

Thanks for the hard work

i can see it takes a lot of similarities to evolution of a gon to the peak