Comments of chapter undefined of Game of Thrones : The Northern Realms

i reread the original and i see you remove the three eyed raven spy since i know harry ask bloodraven to help him find who kills his mother and when varys talk to illyro he admits it to him with a raven overhearing their conversation, good job though. also i cant help but notice or its just me, but harrys change, its drastic i cant put my finger on it but i find his sudden attitude.... strange.. the rant is good about the targaryan sins, the smackdown with cat is a long time coming, it just... came out of nowhere?? anywho looking forward for more.

Thanks for the chapter. I liked the northern history lesson, although I didn't like Harry's attitude towards the Daenerys situation. I guess the high and mighty Harry Potter no longer remembers his childhood, when he was the Dursley's house elf. All that "I can't do it" talk sounds more like "I don't want to do it" to me.

That's for the chapter. Tbh I really want him to save Danny, besides he could have a faceless man save her.

Great. My comment vanished so now I get to do this again You needed to put more emphasis on his frustration before the Cat meltdown, not after. It felt off because of it. Also the big reveal of he espionage was poorly handled as he just blurted it out infront of the whole family, once again humiliating Ned publicly who has been treated like a whipping boy many times already and was something I hoped would change with the new writing staff. That was a matter for private were the two men would have decided her quiet fate. You might want to watch some Charisma on Command videos on You tube. I use it a lot for my own writing and it helps so much in avoiding making an MC a social reject being propped up by plot armor. I am pretty sure the anti Targ speech was nearly point for point lifted from somewhere else, and while a valid spin on historical events it really jarred against his prior treatment of Rhealla. Matching words to actions was one of the stronger points of the original, such as him declaring the Ironborn a pack of worthless savages and then trying to kill them all, but here he declares the Targs a bitter enemy, but he plays patty cake with this ex-queen when he should have slain her. Anyway, best regards.

The worst thing about this is its Harry Potter and he has magic. "We can't do anything" except teleport, take the girl and come back so she can be with her family. Invisible, mind control, fire and lighting but the author goes with "we cant do anything'. He could teleport, he could bring her, he cloud disguise her and no one would know, they will only wonder. Instead we get this lousy excuse and hope we forget he can do magic.... Why does he have magic? He can't show it for reasons, even to those close to him (fine, rumors will happen). He barely uses it (at least that we see).

Nice

Thanks for the update. I've been waiting for him to put that woman in her place.

Probably the best chapter so far in this story. The simple fact that Aryan is finally dealing with Cat and further consolidating the north is great. The sin’s being pointed out to the dowager Queen is good for the story development as well. Honestly I’m excited for more chapters. Please don’t make us wait to long haha

an incredible chapter. I just didn't want the question of Daenerys's marriage to Khal Drogo. Anyway, waiting for more chapters.

Take all my stones

The Targaryen treatment of the North is never ever stated clearly... This is ome of the first times ever I have read so on any sort of fanfic... Kudos to you for that! This chapter had a lot of errors, spelling or grammar.. Few are easy to ignore, this chapter felt a bit of a chore due the errors.... Can u get a beta for the fic?

Thank you kindly for the chapter 😁

thanks for the chapter

The author is doing a great job of continuing the story.

Thanks for the chapter

Awesome chapter man! Not gonna lie, i was unsure if you would be able to continue from where the original author stopped but you definitely proved me wrong. It's been very good so far!

I thank you for the chapter.