Comments of chapter undefined of Reincarnated With The Van Helsing System

Reincarnated With The Van Helsing System

Barion_Trident

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LadyAstreausLv3LadyAstreaus

I have a question does the wording, grammar, character personalities/quirks ever get fixed to at least a standard level of English for pre-teens? it feels like I'm reading some Year 2/3 level work.

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LadyAstreausLv3LadyAstreaus

Thank you for the info. I apologise if it seemed offensive but it was genuinely painful to read. It has potential but it doesn't flow and is overall frustrating because of that.

Barion_Trident:Well, I don't know how to judge if the characters were written by a pre-teen, if you are asking wheter there is character development as the chaps go by then the answer is yes, did my grammar improve over time I would say yes, even back then I don't think the story was unreadable though, but overall I think one can notice the changes the more the story advances.

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Barion_TridentAuthorBarion_Trident

Yo guys kinda long chapter, today's image is Edgar Revy (unfortunately I couldn't find an uglier male with fox characteristics XD but he is more on the animal side unlike Liz, Elaine or Erin)

2yr

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ArtaN96Lv15ArtaN96

Aura is already the best waifu for me ❤️ Loli baba is life

1yr

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Robert_C_7044Lv15Robert_C_7044

Really good foundation. And story. Gg author

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darkimortalLv6darkimortal

I'm really liking the story so far. My only issue is that when the characters are thinking these " " are used, which makes it confusing because you're using them for talking as well. It would be better if you used ' ' for thinking instead.

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UncertaintyLv4Uncertainty

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Alan_Garcia_3344Lv2Alan_Garcia_3344

Uhhh nice chap, I wonder where is Aura though ?

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