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LadyAstreaus10mthCommentedCh 38 CHAPTER 39: The Maid- LadyAstreaus10mthCommented
to be more precise it would be better to say, 'This cunning woman baited me into her trap.' *
Arthur saw all the Revy family members who were having some doubts, now changing their attitudes and he gritted his teeth, "this cunning woman… made fell into a trap", he thought. - LadyAstreaus10mthCommented
The hahaha that's constantly use needs to be removed nobody does that, it's forced unnatural and down right weird. let alone when you think.
"I didn't even kiss a girl on my past life and now I'm seeing three beauties naked, sigh I guess this is the heavens making up to me for the shitty father they gave me… two times in a row hahaha", he thought. - LadyAstreaus10mthCommented
intrigued by the fact that you gained them after defeating the manticore. *
"Now that you know the origin of our friendship is time to speak some serious matters… little Daimon can you show big sister some of those "skills" you mentioned back then on the carriage, I'm quite intrigued on the fact that you got them after defeating the manticore". - LadyAstreaus10mthCommented
how dare you try and harm my son!?* Supposed to be a rhetorical. Add and exclamation to you are dead meat! or you are DEAD MEAT! something like that to shows she's angry/furious. Quite a few bad sentence structures and gramtical errors so far, but otherwise it feels like it'll be a clichéd but enjoyable slice of life harem that might be written well.
"Victor I never got along with you but… how dare you try to harm my son, you are dead meat", she then checked to see If her storage ring was on her son's pocket and she was happy, he still had it, she took out some clothes to use, due to her body being covered in dirt, she didn't try to put on any underwear instead she wore a nightgown dress but she noticed that her clothes were too big for her. - LadyAstreaus10mthCommented
Just* peculiarity*
To be fair, it wasn't Aisha's fault to misunderstand the situation, her memory was a bit off because she had juts revived a few hours ago and she confused the symptoms with going "astray" a particularity of the vampire race that occurs when they are too hungry and need to drink blood to the point where they lose their rationality and attack whatever is near them. - LadyAstreaus10mthCommented
heritage*
One's magic core is a part of the body like a second heart which function is to regulate the magic flow, without it a person will be poisoned by the mana in the air and turn into a mindless beast like the monsters that prey on the forests and seas of this world before dying, his mother was now suffering something like that, luckily her body was stronger due to her vampire inheritance or she would have died immediately. - LadyAstreaus10mthCommented
The grammar needs to be fixed up ya know. Capitals, punctuation, spelling.
In my 1st hours of new life, I had to now feed on my mother's breast, again. while those reincarnation novels focused a lot on their mom's breast and creepy stuff like that. As a newborn you can't really do that, 1st of all, you're basically goddamned blind. 2nd, you would have an instinctual reflex to suck and feed, you're running on fumes at this point. I'm exhausted as hell, sure as hell I'll drink a lot or I'll die just in the 1st day. - LadyAstreaus10mthCommentedCh 98 Chapter 98: As Long as You Persist
- LadyAstreaus11mthCommented
Medusa, Zi Yan, Qing Lin and the Xiao Yi Xian. They're the best romance choices and can provide strong whilst not ruining it. Gu Xun'er can to, I'd like for her to be in it but the first four are more important equally it that. the only frustrating thing is Zi Yan's development potential has been utterly wasted especially but the fact she shoukd have been the first romance.
Ch 325 Chapter 324: Medusa's Dilemma - LadyAstreaus11mthCommented
the honrofics and killing the flow, the mood, the book. its already at around 3.5. if goes lower I'm out.
Sona's face immediately flushed as she looked away and said, "Shut up, stupid James-Kun," in a small voice. - LadyAstreaus11mthReplied to LuxAtro
Not particularly but she's spitting facts, I'd be passed of but sulk, tf you gonna do where mobs can Slaughter you?
I was having a hard time not laughing as I could hear her walking awkwardly from only having one high heel on her, but I wasn't going to apologize after she got in my face and told me I was basically an invalid. - LadyAstreaus1yrCommented
nope. throw shade at Luna, she ain't it. I like her but she's not first wife material never has been and never will be. she has no unique way of supporting him, any of the other 3 woman so far coukd do what she does just as well if not better.
Luna trembled and stuttered "You mean?!" Cross nodded and said "Maybe, I will love others. Maybe, you will have to share me. Maybe, I'm being selfish. BUT, you! You mean so much more to me. You've been with me since I was the little elf from the streets, hiding my identity with layers of masks. My true personality hidden beneath them all..." - LadyAstreaus1yrCommented
Catching feelings already.
Jasmine watched from the Sky Poison Pearl in utter shock, she could feel the aura from inside. It wasn't his profound energy... It was like his will being forced onto others! Like as if he was the King! It made her little heart palpitate in a feeling she didn't quite understand.