John_Doever
Seems well thought out and the character is clearly fleshed out. Except for the cringy dialogue. First of all this abuse is completely unreasonable and unrealistic. If anything it would be disgusted scowls and looks. Not verbal abuse. It’s just cringe and unrealistic. Sometimes a comment here or there. But it’s just idiotic that someone is so offended by a “Dud” if I wrote this I would change the verbal abuse to scowls, looks and a comment here or there. Just my suggestion though. Good job so far.