Comments of chapter undefined of The Ink Collector

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Quite a full on start. I feel like you could have made this chapter two separate chapters, maybe having more of an interaction before he died, or setting a clear theme for the story, becuase in the opening chapter, someone should really be drawn in and get a feel for the story, something that makes it even just slightly unique, you know? This is just my opinion, hope you have a good day.

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Very good start. And I loved the descriptions.

Thank you for the comment. I really appreciate it😁. Worry not, I already started revising the entire chapters. Hopefully soon, I'll be able to make it better. I'm really excited though, listening to your criticism made me more learn lots of things.

I made an alright start for a system maybe? [Shapeshifter System] CURRENT FORM ATK(attack) (input number) DEF(defense) (input number) STA(stamina) (input number) SPIRITUAL FORM WIL(willpower) SPR (spiritual power) SKILLS: MOLLECULAR SHAPESHIFTING Allows user to shift the molecules in their body to create a new form SPR AND WIL IS USED ACCORDING TO USAGE OF SKILL MOLLECULAR DUPLICATION Allows user to duplicate molecules in their or other’s bodies SPR AND WIL IS USED ACCORDING TO USAGE OF SKILL MOLLECULAR STRENGTHENING Allows user to strengthen the molecules in their body in different directions SPR AND WIL IS USED ACCORDING TO USAGE OF SKILL

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