Comments of chapter undefined of My Upgrades Are Invincible Old/Betrayed/Forgotten/Dead
My Upgrades Are Invincible Old/Betrayed/Forgotten/Dead
Azazyel
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There, their, they're. Look up the difference so you don't look like an idiot who uses there everytime like they were unable to pay attention to even the basics in school. Also learn to use commas so your sentences aren't just a string of pure consciousness.
If you want perfect grammar don't look for it on the fanfiction section of Webnovel. FFS man, it's a free story AND only the first chapter.
coldpyr0:Excellent rebuttal, well argued, 10/10. Unfortunately, it still doesn't make your story readable for people who enjoy literature as more than just an escape from reality. Honestly don't know how people who do enjoy it as an escape can stay immersed when reading entirely wrong words or sentences that they have to pause and process in order to understand them because you were too lazy to put in commas to break up the separate thoughts or actions. Glad I dropped your story if your response to criticism is to act like a child instead of considering improving your writing, or even just ignoring it.
El comienzo aunque no es malo puede mejorar. La parte donde es telesportado a otro mundo sin nada se siente un poco bastante decepcionante, pero como no hay Novelas buenas hoy en dia me conformare con seguir leyendo y ver si es buena la historia. Despues de todo no tengo nada que hacer dejare un. Comentario si es buena la historia o di me acuerdo de dejar un comentario.
He thought that a good story would be one of someone normal who, although he is in the protagonist's family, does not try to conquer his girls or something like that. Just live. But then he meets girls that he hangs out with from time to time, they show similar interests, they talk, and then they become friends, they care about each other and they fall in love and make boyfriends. Not just talk about Bell and then get engaged. Something more organic and that although it arises from time to time so that its chronology can be seen, it would not last (if it is an anime) more than two minutes. (In the novel I suppose a small conversation scene, a weird quote mid-chapter and etc. [This is translated from Spanish]
