Comments of chapter undefined of Incubus's Curse: Path To Incubism
Incubus's Curse: Path To Incubism
TurtleMaster6319
Chapter comments18
Rated M for Meh. It has an interesting story but it's so jarbled and confusing. Adding into this is the 'my guy' comments and others like it. It feels more like the author couldn't properly write out the descriptions of events or is trying to be a quirky narrator. The pov shifts and the chaotic nature of flashbacks make it extremely jarring. I can kind of follow the flow of the overall story but for the reasons mentioned it just doesn't read smoothly. It's still good, kind of enjoyable, and readable but needs some work and fixing. I do hope the author can grow through the writing and come back with an editor to fix the flow. Solid 3.5/5
Not going to drop. Just have to pace my reading so it isn't so confusing. I'll drop a comment now and again on future chapters.
TurtleMaster6319:thank you for the feedback and that's actually what I'm trying to do, I noticed this the month I made this novel but when I tried editing I couldn't find a way to properly smooth out the first 10-20 chapters, without screwing everything up, however I have in these past 2 months without a bug jumble of changing everything but I do feel it's all still a chaotic mess in the first volume. I appreciate what you said and of there are any major things you see if you haven't dropped this novel, I'd seriously appreciate it.
Continuing on Vedoril’s point about “quirky narration”, The comments are assuming that we have the same interests as you, the author. I.e, “like Kirito..”, “Like the weeb he is”, etc. Just because we like your writing, does not mean we also share your interests. In my opinion, holding off from narrating under that assumption could allow your work to reach a broader audience. If you want to do that anyways.
I will go with meh. the novel is good but confusing. it has a huge room of improvement that I would like for the author sama to explore. I do see this novel making it big but if the author sama wants to reach such nights at a certain point in time he will have to go back and rewrite either the whole story or just some parts. hope I didn't hurt the author sama feelings and motivation, but instead take my review and try to improve the novel. I really wish for this novel to make it big yo be able to proudly boast to my (immaginary) friends that I was the first to find this novel. hehe
