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Maybe edit 'got them off' to 'got them out.'
I've read this up until chapter 40. Things were mostly fine with small errors. Repeating chapters once and character names getting mixed up a few times.Right at chapter 40, when the content becomes locked, the quality takes a nose dive. I couldn't read more than a few paragraphs before coming to post this and remove it from my library.
A couple of repeated paragraphs.
This is literally a repeat of information given just before this. I've seen this a few times in this novel. I'm not going to make assumptions about why the information is doubled, but it should stop.
Do you want to eat a snowman?
No, the way this phrase is used is correct. Other ways of expressing this could be things finally boiled over, things were brought to light, etc.
Wasn't there supposed to be two sets of demonic revolvers and an item to combine them into one? Pride and Greed I believe.
If it's spaced out and gives something to the story then it's fine. Like the addition of where the injuries are was nice. I'll keep doing this slowly as I read and mark ones that seem kind of un needed. It's a nice little addition but having to work it out word by word and not just copy paste is a bit slow. I'm sure the pace will pick up the more I do.
I think they're asking for the morse code in the comments section or a paragraph comment to copy and paste. Otherwise I'll just continue doing this myself and slowly posting the messages.
If she was a human, the areas zero five was stabbed in would be the upper section of the latissimus dorsi and the erector spinae. The organs that would've been damaged the most are her left kidney, and the right side of her intestines. The morse code translated...I'm pretty sure
AS THE STORY DEVELOPS I PLAN TO RELEASE SOME OF THE DETAILS THAT DON'T MAKE IT INTO THE CHAPTERS, BUT IT WOULDN'T BE FUN TO JUST GIVE THEM AWAY LIKE THAT! There. I took the time to decode the morse code at the very end of the chapter. Screw it. This is what I'm doing now. I'll only read this when I have the time to do this so no one else has to.
This might not get seen but this should not be listed as a chapter. This is something that should be put into an auxiliary volume/chapter. While myself and many others undoubtedly appreciate something to reference the levels of progression and items gained, it definitely should not be the first chapter of Volume 1. Make a volume 0, name it auxiliary, glossary, etc. and leave the info there.