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Thanks for the chapter. I don’t really understand the main character’s personality. It’s like he completely lacks self awareness at times unable to understand his own actions. As it stands he has no tangible drive aside from revenge thats no longer possible. I think before anything else his character needs to be more fleshed to help readers understand what kind of person he is and explain his decisions.
I really like this story. I hope that in the future the MC meets the guy he switched places with and defeats him so he can take back all the skyscraper that was taken. Because I have the impression that if we leave that aside it will leave a hollow. But otherwise I will look forward to the next chapter. And if the MC takes the dragon fruit at punk hazard will it be pink or another color? I wish you good luck with your writing and congratulations again.
I’m gonna have offer some different devil fruits cause I really think the dragon fruit is kinda overrated when it comes to fanfics. Take the metal metal fruit from the guy here The axolotol fruit The bomb bomb fruit from mister 5 (in my opinion this fruit is hella underrated and completely underused. This fruit would make the user a great hand to hand fighter plus he could pull a gambit and charge items into bombs.) Vibration fruit (this would be an OC fruit but it’s a weaker but more versatile version of whitebeard fruit. For references think the flash for speed and vibrating his molecules to imitate logia’s intangibility)