Comments of chapter undefined of Marvel: Mortal Ascension

You need to speed up his growth !!! It is slightly boring watching him be the weaker one among all the important characters he interacts with !!!There is also the fact that we don't know much of his goals other than growing stronger....

I don't think you should worry about the rankings now...you already have a good enough ranking for a relatively new book...

try not to make it so whenever he needs something, it somehow comes up in the same chapter, try to throw hints for future plot lines to make the story more immersive

Wait, is this going to be a "hero" story, ie the stupid comic logic of no killing at any cost? I'd hate to follow the novel to find out this is the case.

Think theyre only there because they are further along in the story even though youve had him do a few things like youve said the past few chapters hes still basically bottom of the barrel with nothing to really show for it when you compare him to other makes it all seem kinda pointless at the moment.

I think you should not worry about the rankings, your story is really great. Especially this is a new book wait for it to pick up some traction, It will easily penetrate the Top 20 although you have harsh competition there. Although you have a great writing talent and ability you are still not up to par with CORNBRINGER and MisterImmortal's caliber, But you are close

there was whole in this chapter, i believe.. did he metion changing the ancient armor into serenity's clothes? and also, serenity appearing right after they went to Edward Bell seems suspicious..

dude needs a time skip and a power up pronto

also most people on this app dont know what a good fic is so everyone wants harem. PLS DONT DO HAREM IT IS THE WORST GENRE EVER AND RUINS THE STORY

While you can improve as a writer, i think that in this case the issue is the amount of avaible chapters, the lack of an harem, the mc being too kind and his weakness. Adding the romance tag might attract more people. Many of the most popular stories here are even worse than this one quality wise.

Story is going good. Ur a great writer and when ur story gains more traction it will shoot through the rankings. U can add more tags and change the cover or title to make it stand out more if u want. U can also change ur chapter length in exchange for longer update times. Don’t focus on peters life or babysitting him or other hero’s life, focus on ur character more and his romance with Diana. You could easily flesh that out with Diana being connected to the Amazons and stuff. Flesh out ur combat more btw. I’d rather see one big build up and a epic fight than just multiple fights with gangsters and people in invisibility cloaks. That’s all I can think of for now

The mc is boring im quickly loosing interest.

Less drama or no drama

great novel, has superb potential, but u don't pay to the character powers looks he's biology-,electronic/mechanical guy, I understand he's worried he just got out of the well to a whole f.. world of superpowered villains / evils / god's he can feel weak but after initial fear humans try to overcome those weaknesses, plot like this take time and some people don't enjoy take time like with wine! to get to know struggles and prefer Pill/potion/miracle solving problems, your story is different it shows a regular human struggle! I know he's talents in science and KunFu or martial Arts are there! but! he's human and even 100% human power is nothing comapre to shimpanzi not to mention Gorilla that why we got science to help us out I would love to see that implemented into the story%, but I've mention before even that has its limits and to break those limits imagination and struggle and stubborn mind is needed! Be proud ! that's the charm of your story!

Thanks

It should be easy to surpass the limits for him than those martial artist. This is marvel and I dont think any of those martial artists were scientists so why is he taking so long? Just make a syrum or smth to break limits.

I think your story is great, but I just found it. You will be getting my power stones from now on.

I think the book is awesome but too few chapters. Also, this book will not be truly respected because you skip a lot of the story. Show us his daily romance with Diana, you just skipped over her after finding out about her best friend. Expand the universe to keep us invested. Show us a day in Diana's shoes. Show us Tony Stark finding out about Serenity or something. Don't narrow our view to one character. Fill the time skips with something else. His growth can excel in the time skips but use it to show different characters.

he should make a mind Palace like Sherlock with no magic involved