Comments of chapter undefined of The Mask Of The Monster

In this chapter, I really did picture the main character and her thoughts and feelings so that is a plus my only advice is that make a sequence for the readers to get hook ( a cliffhanger ) so they will no doubt read the following chapter. Nonetheless, since you wrote that a good thing will happen in the following chapters, I'll be gladly read the next one.

Hello! Good work! There is a few places where grammar is a little bit of a problem, but I think as you continue reading and writing you will get better and better! The flow of writing is good, I can follow the story and Ella's thought processes easily. The only area I particularly don't care for is that this story seems a little bit like an over-used trope (At least from what I've read so far). "The girl who has no friends, parents are mean to her, wears baggy clothes and messy bun/ponytail" this basic character type is used A LOT, especially in the world of online novels. I'm gonna predict now that she's gonna have a love-hate relationship with the ML (But maybe I'm wrong). I recommend spicing it up a little. Give your character a unique and loveable back story and try to stay away from clichés! That being said, I still enjoyed your first chapter a lot, and think you have a lot of potential as a writer! keep up the good work!

What a horrible family she has!! How can a mother treat her own child like that and allow another man to treat her that bad as well? 🙃

A mostly uneventful first chapter, but I believe it's purpose was to merely set the scene of MC's circumstances. All in all, good work 👍

She need to find happiness.