I like your novel but you write what the characters say in quotes like
"Ah, boss why are you here, you just have ordered me. I am here to do your work"
otherwise, it's very confusing, you understand...
I would like it, if you do those changes...
I think I am out from the first chapter. The grammar just doesn’t flow smoothly and it really feels wrong. Possibly it may improve but I just can’t help feeling off when reading.
English is not the authors first language but surely a proofreader could have alleviated a lot of this.