Comments of chapter undefined of One Piece: Gambling to The Top

I think this is the first book I can remember reading where the Mc name is Josh. Josh is always a side character lol

I smell a great story

Need proof reading, lots of grammar issues in the first chapter isnt a good start.

kinda weak start and lame mc but at least it's not so bas as to make me wanna stop reading. Gotta keep reading to see if it's worth it

bro, the first chapter is there to advertise how good your story will be. If it has SO MANY grammer mistakes then dont blame ppl for dropping

A few suggestions: Try to cut down on the use of commas. Too many commas make the breaks too awkward and overall disrupts the reading experience. Try to avoid using the word "unconsciously". Most of the time, it can be removed altogether. However, if you must use something along those lines, I would go for "subconsciously". It makes more sense and is more widely used.

Lottery is a word I don’t like being used for Systems. The meaning of the word just don’t fit.

pretty promising imo

Needs an English soeaking proofreader. Tense issues abound. And little things like unconsciously being used instead of subconsciously.

The fact that he needs to collect berries could also mean he was in the animal crossing world

Is this a translation?

Umu!. A Promising Novel!

Exp

Looks great

Alright, just finished MHA fanfic. Gonna try this but I am pretty sure I will like it :)

Nice not making mc too op

i feel like i read this before