In what paragraph does it say his power can create a fake falna that can deceive gods?

The only issue is he doesn't really seem to care about his ladies. Seems very selfish. Good story still though.

Not even the complete memories of a retard just comics and his own name. Love what's the point? Just give Logan those new memories and call it a day.

It would have made far more sense to just give Logan those memories instead.

The whole point of the setup in the first chapter is meaningless due to the lost memories. It's like winning a million dollars but paying a million and taxes. It's self defeating.

You got my stones thank you.

You got an example, like a movie or video where someone get stuff on their nose while eating with a spoon?

And either you have a really large or pointy nose. Or are very messy eater. I have seen some OCD force people to touch the spoon to their nose before eating and at least that makes sense. But her nose touching the spoon whole eating normally? That us not something that happens unless something is very off.

How the hell does a nose touch the spoon an accident. Let's just not acknowledge the fact the it's written as the DRIPs fell onto her nose and assume she somehow got a bite of ice cream on a spoon and it what? Is such a large spoonful, that it somehow touches her nose and simultaneously fits in her mouth? Or is her nose just really really long? Either way, the physics isn't physicing.

Feel very stilted and just OFF. Shouldn't have started Here either. You made Hal too enjoyable to change the mian character. I don't really want to read anything else now.

How does ice cream drip onto a nose? Maybe if is was a cone, but she's eating it with a spoon, and gravity exists, so unless Misty's nose Is below her mouth this makes no sense. And again the chapter is too short. No stones for you.

Nope completely accurate. The reincarnated person somehow looses all his memories aside form comics. Uts very cringe and serves no purpose at all but to make the chatacter unrelatabke. He doesn't even remember how to take a shit beforehand gets access to James memories.

He killed the memories of the reincarnated person. Why not just drop the meta knowledge into wolverine instead? Why remove memories of the reincarnated? It stakes this all so fucking annoying!

What you need to know is that Rick the Mc has clmpete amnesia and only remembers comics and it doesn't look like that's going to change. It a real bummer and makes it hard to relate to someone who is born in the first chapter. The amnesia is just simply too cliche. Authors need to stop doing that. It ruins everything.

Okay this is weird. He just flew and you may it so Blaise. Like being in another body with powers was another Tuesday. The tone is all off.

What a nothing chapter that does nothing but make the Mc look stupid. Literally all that happens in this chapter is him returning and a conversation that shouldn't be needed to explain what was already explained once before.

I don't mind, but the best way to learn English is to speak it out aloud. Not write.

These chapters if other pov's were fine but can't be all you release. If you wanna do anpov swap chapter just make sure there is a chapter posted along with it, that actually moves the mc's story forward.

If course not who would listen to this but at all?

Stupid orphan trope in the first chapter. Trash. Try to do some actual eroding instead of starting witha blank slate. And furthermore, what's with the stupid make choices? If you write in English, use a name the an English reader would enjoy.