Comments of chapter undefined of Reincarnated With The Strongest System
Reincarnated With The Strongest System
Elyon
Chapter comments118
man where do I start this is so screwed up William has no business paying for anything it's not his town to pay for and it wasn't his idea to go get Celine it was Owen's either way you look William has no business paying for anything and how can you even twist logic for this to make sense and forgive Celine for him to be a dark mage ? Already is lvl 11 ,for curse immunities ? He has skills and a system for that either way you look at it seems like an author power trip
The enslavement definitely feels contrived and shoehorned into the story. I really think you should have thought this through a bit more. Here's why it doesn't work : - any adult who cares about Will would offer to take his place as a slave since they were all saved from the beasts. - the debt doesn't make sense and they wouldn't just accept that as the reason for a child's enslavement. - if Will hadn't fetched Celine, her experiment would have been destroyed by the golden-scaled crocodile's dragon breath anyway, and she would have died. She actually owes Will her life! - and more, but I'll stop here. I think I've made my point.
Its weird that he didn't go to Owen to get his life magic class yet. Especially since it works really well with his current fighting style. Also he should have gone to get a light magic class since it can probably heal better than his first aid skill can. I hope if there is a time skip that he gets these two classes during the time skip.
one of the biggest flaws in this whole thing is he has a system he can't increase his resistance to something like that so far how the author shown the story and the system and power and all those things this would not work for the main character so it's a complete and total waste of time other than a possible requirement to unlock a prestige class
This whole thing makes no sense. Owen was the one who told William to get Celine and it was also to save Lont. If anyone should be paying Celine it should be Owen and the rest of the adults. Throwing all the blame on a 10 year old and having him be enslaved for 4 years is absurd. Not a single adult is willing to take his place or try to get the materials to compensate Celine? Lets not forget that William had previously saved the town and also saved a lot of kids from the crocodiles. But that apparently counts for nothing. If I was William being enslaved and tortured daily (even if it was to make me stronger), theres no way I wouldnt start to resent my family and the town who abandoned me so that they could avoid paying Celine. I would leave the town at the first opportunity and swear to never help them again as they had already shown that they werent willing to help me when I was in trouble.
Okay once again the change was so abrupt that the flow feels too forceful... It's impossible that he will be alright with the torture especially when he never suffered this in his previous life or this one. Even his mental age can only be highest 18 not 28... Not to mention his family doesn't know that he was 18 in his previous life so for them he is still only 10 and also loved and pampered so the reaction doesn't match at all... lastly if I see any indication in the future that she really is the bride I will just drop this...no matter how soft warm and kind she is in the inside
Now this just seems like bad writing. unless there's a huge reason for this I'm going to be very disappointed. It makes very little to no sense, not to mention it's absolutely not his responsibility and makes no sense. Are they his guardians or not, give me a break. He's basically being punished for helping save the town.
You know, 4 years of slavery to save the village is one thing, but even if he's part of the city's nobility, isn't this kinda hurting future ties to his family and village? It's not enough now, but eventually a kid's thoughts would change. "Huh, I *could* save the village, but I think I'll just find a new place to live instead. RIPeace! I'm out."
It’s weird that the parrot monkey is worried about the prophesied prince of darkness hating his master and then immediately helps her torture said prince. Is he not even going to hint that she actually cares? Is it so bad to let him know why he is being tortured? Also, if this is requirement for a prestige class called prince of darkness then it feels like the last requirement would to be either torture or kill their master which again seems counter intuitive with what the parrot wants. On top of everything the whole village treats it like it’s nothing which goes completely against the character traits they have displayed so far. I love the story but this sudden turn seems too sudden and drastic.
Author, I'm going to give you the benefit of the doubt here, that this is just a somewhat weak point in the story and is an attempt at adding a little more of a dark element so that you can transition Will into more of a anti-hero like character. If this is being done to a 10 (Im going to stick with him being 10 because if we go by the idea that he is technically older than that then he just looks like a real moron) year old and he doesn't come out of this with some hardened personality traits such as helping people will get him punished and that he will get revenge on Celine, then your story just doesnt make sense and this is a very very poor piece of writing in these las few chapters.
