Comments of chapter undefined of HP: A Magical Journey [Complete]
HP: A Magical Journey [Complete]
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The sad thing is Ron wasn’t just getting hand me downs, he was getting hand me downs of hand me downs. Things the twins got from Percy, Bill and Charlie were passed down to him. Everything from his books, his wand, his robes and even his owl and pet rat were third-fourth generation hand me downs. It was made even worse when Ginny was born, since everything she got was brand new. Honestly Ron gets way too much flack due to the movie creators piss-poor interpretation of the character. I seriously hope this author isn’t another Ron hater. It’s become way too common these days.
Hi author, I was realy pleased with the beginning and its congruend motive and fleshed out characters. In your second act, the main way of giving information is dialog and with that the problems of it come along. Im not the best in this topic and shouln’t give you tips. The only thing I can give you is the feeling I receive: The Dialog feels not human and alive through no purpose or no subtext in it. The MC at the moment feels like a person that is influenced by the plot and not the other way around. I at the moment don’t know what the MC needs, what he wants is to know magic and also at the same time some form of control over his future. But there is still no indication about his main motive and purpose exept leaning magic, but that seems to not longer be his main driving force. Good work and I hope you were able to read to the end The End
