Comments of chapter undefined of Cultivating Disciples to Breakthrough
Cultivating Disciples to Breakthrough
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Here are advice for the "...." part, sometime and depend on some scene it fine and maybe good to use, but most of the time I don't think it a good way to do so and waste of opportunity, here are copy of other advice in other novel here (nothing personal, it was for other author): -------------------------------------------- Comment advice for the description: + You seem to be vastly underestimating the importance of body language in conversations. The biggest offender is the conversation between the friend and protaganist at the bar. There are so many things left unexpressed. Is the friend sad, resigned or annoyed at the sight of the protaganist like that? When the protaganist cracks jokes, does he fake a smile, or maybe he's genuinely smiling? During the silence between the two of them, don't use [...] to express that silence, describe it instead. Do they look uncomfortable? Are they fidgeting? Does the protaganist clench his fists at the reminder of his parents? Or does he just look away from his friend's eyes? It's not just limited to that particular scene, but in all of the scenes there could be more body language used. These types of things add a lot to the personality and believability of the characters. ----------------------------------- + Why would you ever do these "..." dialogues? They exist to do nothing but waste an opportunity to describe with words the tension, appearance, actions, etc of anything that happens after a dialogue is spoken. You can literally explore anything that is within the silence instead of just being like "..." do you see how wasteful this is?
