Comments of chapter undefined of The Challenger's Return: Rebirth of the Rainbow Mage

The pacing in the last couple chapters has been incredibly rushed. First Otto is strongarmed into Cooperation with the two massive powers, then before we are even told what this Cooperation is even about, or how it would operate, it's already been nuked. It doesn't even really make sense for the power to reverse their course like that. If they were really planning to get rid of Otto so blatantly, they would have just tried to assassinate him without him knowing, instead of attacking his business interests giving him a warning and time to prepare. And if they were trying to get rid of Otto in a nonviolent way, they would have needed to gather lots of intelligence to figure out WHY the kids follow him, in order to convince them NOT to (which is pretty much impossible, but they don't know that if they don't try to gather intelligence). We also have the government official who was petrified. After Otto saved her, it just jumps straight to him getting the gold card. There is no dialogue about her thanking him, or giving him information or the card, and there is also no mention of the fact that even though he saved her, she will probably just be killed later of the powers that tried to kill her find out she didn't die. Overall it's very frustrating to watch to Author try to cram way to much plot into too small a chapter length. That pacing of this novel, and the level of detail, it what got it it's fanbase. Suddenly skimping on the details of plot, and having the pacing increase is quite sad to see. Maybe the Author might want to get an editor to point this stuff out before a chapter is published. I'm willing to edit for free on a trial basis to see if Author would actually benefit form an editor.

Im scared for this novel. It is soo good that it makes top ten of my favorite web novels already And its barley started. The first floor arc was amazing, better than some battles that happen 500 chapters in During other series. Thats why it scares me, because there are 100 floors. IDK how the author plans them out but it is going to be very hard to repeat such amazingness each floor. I really hope the author proves my fear wrong.

I didn't quite understand the transition between the first and second part of the chapter. did the old man instantly reverse his decision the second the MC disagreed with him? I'm confused.

Thanks for the chapter

I absolutely loved this chapter and how much it cleverly hinted at more to come, which I think could of been used in the chapters for the first floor. Anyone who gets annoyed at this chapter is showing how little patience they have as anything that seems off will clearly be explained in future chapters,

I am really enjoying this chapter I love it when the main character uses his brain more than his bronze thank you so much for all your hard work I think it is going fantastic so far

Meant to say, good edits for CLARITY before. I do apologize--I have sausage thumbs that interfere with my efforts to use my phone keyboard.

Nice

Thanks for the chapter

no idea what's going on

Nice

Thanks for the chapter

Thanks for the chapter.

What tf is going on? Im gonna have to reread that.

thanks for the chapter! 😃 --oooohh... plot twist between otto and clatenis! of course, who's the fish they want to catch? is it golden glow girl? --wait, what if it's the family of that girl who also cleared <extreme> difficulty but got offended by how otto shrugged her off? the timing feels kinda right.

these last fucking chapters are so fucking annoying with their time skips. You keep skipping important conversations. facts. or stuff that happens. its just a ****ign time skip all the time. like ****. its not mysterious, its plain annoying as hell. you have done it multiple times in a row in the past few chapters. get a grip.

Dear author, your comment about keeping the scheming rational and easy to understand? Yeah, you failed. Because we don't know what Otto's cooperation is with Clatenis, we don't understand why they are staging this little act. I liked the pace of the story. I don't know why you suddenly changed from temporal sequence story telling to these sudden jumps in time and place with no context, but *for me*, it's wrecking the story. Also starting at chapter 69, you have broken your promise as a writer. A cliffhanger is a promise to the reader for later payoff. The poor timing or lack of payoff is breaking that promise and leads readers to revolt. Do it more than once and you lose trust. I have lost trust. I look at the next chapter that I have to pay to read, and I hesitate. I don't like the way the storyline is now jumping around, no context, and multiple cliffhangers now no payoff. Why should I waste my money just to be disappointed and frustrated again? But I am also pissed off, because I was really enjoying this story.

M8 the chapters are to rushed, and your skipping some details that will confuse people, especially when some part when reading

I mean, this is such a super good story. And i really like this type of story. It's really well written an good so i try not to nitpick, just, stuff like this annoys me immensely.