Comments of chapter undefined of The Ancients World

This whole story needs a lot more commas, feels like you can't catch your breath.

very bad english.

I have high expectations for this novel😁👍

i dont understand this.. he retun in time with a item of the game but act like the game is only a game... why a time traveler act like the game is a game in his inner world, outside ok i understand but in your mind???

and the end of stroy somebody get another world item and **** him to the bone, finally another tale of revengers~

Seems promising. Author, please rewrite the sentence when the MC speaks with his sister about becoming an actress, because I re-read it so many times and it still confuses me.

Nice opening.

Praying this will be a great novel

Nice

First chapter looks good.

Thanks for the chapter~🐱

Good start but i hope blue chaos is a badperson because i think its not good idea to get what person should be get on the future.Although your purpose is to provide your family a happy and healthy lifesteal which is good but its still steal other people things or property specially if that person is similar to his family situation maybe also a poor and they have also have financial problem and its just lucky to get that divine class which can solve their crisis too.So i hope blue chaos ng from his past is a bad person and uses his blessing in wrong manner.

This was a great start! Thanks for the chapter ☺️

The grammar is confusing. I re read the part where he was talking to her sister many times but still can't understand

Thx

I didn’t exactly understood the role model and the reason being that Cera was his only brother,so what about his sister?Does he see her as a role model too?She was her only sister.

See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola

info dump, gotta love it

I have high expectations in this novel. Hope the English gets better over time