Comments of chapter undefined of My CEO Harem Cultivation System
My CEO Harem Cultivation System
RachelRuth
Chapter comments48
Personally, I like this way. He's not OP yet, but have tendencies to be OP. Not a harem seeking yet, but have tendencies to do so. IMO, maybe the pace need to be quicken. There's some useless thing to say, something like CEO who keep busying himself with his paper. This kind of thing isn't won't change your story at all. So it best you can do some editing maybe? Ah I know it needs money or even time to do so. But it will make the story more enjoyable to read. Last thing, you're doing great. IDK how many original novel out there that I drop because the story isn't relatable or the plot is so forced that it makes you cringe. At least for now, I like how it progress, slice of life novel with harem romance in the future in modern world, with not so OP (yet) MC that doesn't depend too much on system.
This is only my opinion. It true the character is kinda annoying however this is how character development is. By the way I think it good stay as it is and do it on your own pace. Also I curios why this mc had this kind attitude. Maybe make a chapter why he become like this? Anyway thanks for the chapter and have a nice day.
I also think the MC needs to learn from each encounter and mission. He can't stay this stiff with women for too long. Why not make him a real gentleman bit by bit, better at talking, more attentive idk. The atmosphere would go from awkward to confortable around him. Maybe use the cultivator side to make him learn music, cooking etc (better senses, better memory, better coordination idk) women can really appreciate them. (at least for mortal ones) Him not being a pervert is good. He could keep his stance against the system and just charm them during missions. He doesn't need to fall in love or "snu snu" everytime. You could also make him learn Jalousy when his past targets are courted by others. All these are just ideas. Until now, you have done a good work and I have really enjoyed this story. Maybe just a bit on the "too slow paced" side for me. Good luck and thanks for the story.
I rather like your story so fa and would be rather depressed if you either drastically changed your current pace. As others have mentioned this leaves plenty of room for the growth of the main character, plot and world. but I am in favor of the main characters calm non playboy style. It is refreshing to read and I have enjoyed the story so far so more chapters.[img=update]
nope the story is good as it is coz this gives room to character development but things should spice up, he should get basic knowledge about cultivation world as rewards so that he is not idiot and makes wrong choices when it comes to cultivation coz he did when he didnt buy technique and bought something else to be on 1st lvl Also regarding harem he should learn from every encounter instead of remaining stiff...... there is no need of a perverted OP MC make him gradually stronger and gradually a pervert(jk).... his personality should change from being stiff, cold to kindness towards his women(idk when he will start adding women to his harem). from his current personality it looks like it will take another 100 chapters for the first harem member to be added in harem. need to increase pace a bit, also some action not necessary it is directly related to MC but he watches some other cultivators fight or he can visit upper worlds for short times to gain knowledge, exp and other things so his horizon is broadened
I really like it as it is. It's something a little different, and many got bored of the same storyline. About the MC, I like him. Simp - I don't even know what it means. I have my guesses but the MC definitely is not one. Stiff - yeah, a little. Could be more charismatic, but I guess this is character development Let's say I see him a little... robotic. I've seen a comment saying to make him more gentlemanly and profficient in something, which I think it's a good idea. For the rest, keep at your own pace, or go faster, but preserve the story as many could say it's slow-paced(personally I don't mind). Anyways I like it and I'll read it, I understand you want to become popular and make money, but making the same thing as many others by listening to readers' choices will not make you different. You'll write the same story using different names and I think it's kind of difficult to do something to stand out in an ocean of same things.
I think chronologically your chapter writing is confusing, bouncing around forward then backward in time within the same chapter. then the next chapter you rehash from another perspective. the mc is supposed to be the driver of the story. little snippets of harem potential reactions and thoughts is really great, but maybe do it within the same chapter as the interaction. So far 20 chapters in and not a single woman knows where they stand with the mc. in fact, he doesn’t really even have an interest in any woman yet. Difficult to build a harem when the mc has no idea how to interact with women, no does he Know how to build interpersonal relationships because he a bit cold and aloof.
I hope you have not changed the way things are going! I like your style and so far I have no complaints. In fact it is Quality work. The MC's progression is written very well. I personally have 3 deal breaker for in novels. 1 - MC loses girls or pushes them away to friend. 2 - Tragic deaths of harem 3 - The story focuses too much on another side character and gives them a harem too. From your style I do not see that happening and I hope I am right. Anyways it is your story and the primary goal should be what you want, as it will last long and you can finish it. You should not be forced into writing a story you do not like.
