BlackSmurf
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For real?! Take my like!!!!
I really like it as it is. It's something a little different, and many got bored of the same storyline. About the MC, I like him. Simp - I don't even know what it means. I have my guesses but the MC definitely is not one. Stiff - yeah, a little. Could be more charismatic, but I guess this is character development Let's say I see him a little... robotic. I've seen a comment saying to make him more gentlemanly and profficient in something, which I think it's a good idea. For the rest, keep at your own pace, or go faster, but preserve the story as many could say it's slow-paced(personally I don't mind). Anyways I like it and I'll read it, I understand you want to become popular and make money, but making the same thing as many others by listening to readers' choices will not make you different. You'll write the same story using different names and I think it's kind of difficult to do something to stand out in an ocean of same things.