MoeJam90
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while description is nice and building atmostpher is true art, its very contrasting going from the first chapter to this which seems to almost completely bring the momentum to a halt at least in the first half.. reading it thoroughly is... a yawn* not gonna lie. but asking a reader to skim takes away from the reading experience when you're skimming almost the entire chapter lol. just putting it out there for your next books you write