Comments of chapter undefined of Supreme Human System

"Hurry, they are coming, you must leave now." "Okay, father, but one last question." "What is it" "Why haven't the other saints come to help?" "Hmm, good question." He grabs a chair, sits down, and brews some tea. Then proceeds to explain in perfect and intricate detail, as if he is lecturing. *So, you're telling me that in the current situation, the father has enough time to ramble FOUR paragraphs? I mean, they must not be in that big of a hurry.

Nice imagery

Overall, not bad. Needs some grammatical corrections, but for the author having english as a second language... I give it two thumbs up!

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nice start!

ok

thanks for the chapter

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Blood monkey?

Ok so the beginning before the "two men and a boy..." Is completely mess... i can't rly understand.. Maybe Rewrite?

aight might as well add this

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Hello sis! You also Indian.. great.