Comments of chapter undefined of Supremacy Games

Ok, for your first attmpt that was pretty good. Excellent choice stopping when you did. Our imaginations will always be better then anyone's written discriptions. Athough stopping sooner, say... when he first made direct contact with her skin and then going to the bedroom while the POV stays in the living room would have made that even stronger. There is a reason why "erotic" stories usually have FAR less *** in them then pure ****. Fleshing out the characters then leaving as much as possible to the imagination is way ***ier then just... showing it.

I think it was good since this is not mainly about *** i think this much info is appopriate.

Too much detail is straight up pôrn. Its just my opinion tho.🥱

We are men of culture.

I find It could get more in the detail in the bedroom[img=update]

See this! I just gifted the story: Sword

I miss asna touching noses ...

The only thing missing is a safeword. Like they are consenting and all, but Nora does need a safeword, espacially since she is a newbie. At least that is my opinion.

okay that was good.👌

Will Asna get a scene too? Asking for a friend...

thx for da chapter

Hmmm... Interesting😏

I thank you for the chapter.

nice!

Give up on writing BDSM/Kink!