Comments of chapter undefined of Bloodline Evolution System: Reign of the Dragon Snake

Here are my criticisms: I think some chapters need to be proofread, and I think the romance between Tang Yue and Xander is a bit weird. For the proofread, I think you could just scan over the sentences and check for a couple of mistakes. They're not really that big, though, so I don't care. Your writing style is what really matters here, so I personally don't mind the few errors. For the Tang Yue x Xander ship, I don't really see how Tang Yue is considering him a love interest. To be honest, there has never really been any romantic moments between them. Sure, he was somewhat nice to her and allowed her to live, but he has never actually shown his affection in a way other than, let see, stalking her, annoying her, attacking her, being rude to her, sexually harassing her (in the dream), and ignoring her (during the first half of the story). To me, it sounds like the only thing he likes about Tang Yue is that she has secrets and is interesting, so doesn't that mean that he'll completely lose interest in her if she doesn't have any more secrets? I could understand Charlotte's crush on Tang Yue because of her character growth arc in the dungeon, but Xander basically stayed the same throughout the story. He's only ever been "intrigued" in her and thought she was weird. If he could have some character growth over this arc, like becoming less "intrigued" and more "in love," then I think the romance between Xander and Tang Yue will be better. Sorry for the ranting, I just think that Xander needs more character development to be deserving of Tang Yue, because, as of right now, Charlotte is the only good ship with Tang Yue. Anyways, though, this arc is seriously amazing and I can't wait for more. I look forward to how the events will play out! (especially the romance between Tang Yue and Charlotte *wink* *wink*)

Please don't kill off Charlotte. She is too pure.

I truly love this story, I would still like to see the story be able to show Zanders feelings toward Tang Tue, even if he uses her dreams like before to do it. instead of *** scene, maybe showing more of his feeling too change her mindset of him

I don't want Charlotte to die... I love her as much I love Tang Yue ❤

Xander is a classic example of thinking that a loved one can do no wrong. He's v sweet but good little boy disguise is a bit unfortunate! Tang Yue will feel pretty betrayed if she ever finds out who it really is!

i have to say it but in this arc xander is the most annoying

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Man lots of Xander hate here but I feel like this is just a slow burn relationship. I have no doubt that he and Tang Yue’s relationship with blossom. He needs to work on his honesty but at least he is faithful. Not to mention hos feeling for Tang Yue are clearly growing deeper. Still team Xander here!