Comments of chapter undefined of The Roleplayer
The Roleplayer
RileyPetesGeralt
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hello again. you introduced alfred as alfred but then in the same paragraph changed it to arthur and later again back to alfred. while i know it could be his last name or whatnot i feel like you should make it consistent or at least say his full name first. this is just a little nitpick. thanks for the chapter
Another brilliant installment! Great job! Well done! I am dying to know what happens next! :) Alex is truly showing himself to be both a great role-model and older male influence to Riley. He sure has done alot for Riley. Also it appears that Riley's dad was mentioned for the first time, apparently he was a cop that died or was killed. It seemed to give Riley somewhat of a hatred for mafias/gangsters and only agreed to partner up with Alex, at least initially, because he didn't have much of a choice. Otherwise, he doesn't want to have anything to do with them. For Alex to, so confidently promise that the Brotherhood had nothing to do with his dad's murder is telling. It's understandable that he can speak for himself but to speak for the entire organization? It would be strange unless he knows who the responsible party is. There is no way, otherwise, he can account for the actions of every single member of the mafia, at all times. That's alot of people and he wasn't even the big boss back then.
