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Alright I'm annoyed enough that I have to comment now. I like your story Author but you REALLY need to brush up on you grammar or at least get an editor please. I've noticed that you've been making small mistakes even more in the past 10 chapters or so. One of the examples from this chapter is missing words like: " We're not gonna make *IT*" and stuff like differences between your and you're other things like tenses: "have you forget" should be "have you forgotten" these are the kinds of mistakes that I have noticed the most. It's a small thing but it really ruins the immersion. I hope you can see this as an advice instead of an attack. Thanks for the chapter
hello again. you introduced alfred as alfred but then in the same paragraph changed it to arthur and later again back to alfred. while i know it could be his last name or whatnot i feel like you should make it consistent or at least say his full name first. this is just a little nitpick. thanks for the chapter