Adui
Oh come on man! I waited 24hrs to see what happens with Noah and the emperor of desire and you still didn’t finish it again 💀
Yeah we cared about Noah's scene, not whatever this whole thing was. This is definitely my least favourite part of your novel and you did this a lot during every plot transition. There are too many things happening at once and you always focus on the things we care least about. The main scene we care about moves forward by maybe 0.5 seconds and then you move to a scene we don't care about... Makes it feel like nothing is actually happening and makes me question why I pay for this novel day-to-day when that clearly isn't the reading experience you're catering to.