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_Hyperion_2mthCommentedQuick thing I figured I should mention since I’m enjoying this story. The sentence “I still don’t know why should I give you one” should have the “I” and the “should switched. In english, an indirect question follow the order of subject (I) then the verb (should). A lot of non-native speakers of english end up screwing this up and its one of those small things that are simple to fix, but are just super common.
"That's a good point," Mark finally admitted after taking some time to consider my words. "But I still don't know why should I just give you one," he spoke. "Those things do not come cheap," he added while spreading his arms out.detailRiches and Bitches: I have a gate to an isekai and leveling-up system!Fantasy · MotivatedSloth- _Hyperion_3mthCommentedCh 289 Unrivalled Will
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A total massochist.
"Pain is but a fleeting feeling..." Atlas muttered as the pain reached its peak. - _Hyperion_3mthCommented
This makes no sense.
It's more stupid proof than stupid proof. - _Hyperion_3mthCommented
Plz explain. I an so confused. This sentence makes no sense.
Now, in his ever-expanding Storage Dimension, a galaxy with the printer as its 'sun' began to rotate. - _Hyperion_3mthCommented
Or maybe you’re saying that the Sagittarius A* Black Hole at the center of this galaxy of printers has been replaced with a massive printer?
Now, in his ever-expanding Storage Dimension, a galaxy with the printer as its 'sun' began to rotate. - _Hyperion_3mthCommented
Are you saying that there is a galaxy with stars that have been replaced with massive star sized printers? If this is what you’re saying, then that means for a galaxy the size of the milky way the MC has 100 BILLION printers. Ignoring that the Milky Way is a “relatively” larger galaxy, the smallest know galaxy has 1000 stars. Plz, author, give us decent numbers. This just isn’t an acceptible comparison.
Now, in his ever-expanding Storage Dimension, a galaxy with the printer as its 'sun' began to rotate. - _Hyperion_5mthCommented
Just gotta point something out because I’m pedantic: “calmest air within a 1 million light years in diameter” indicates to me that there is a circle with a diameter of 1 million lightyears, which means that the radius of this circle is 500,000 LY in diameter, meaning that there is no calmer area of the sea within a range of 500,000 LY of the Eternal Voyager. This sentence is midly confusing.
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“Quantum Reef Domain” or “Quantum Rift Domain”?
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If its not a train, then don’t call it a train. Maybe use a word from another language to signify that its something unique. Just adding a strange descriptor to the front of the word just makes it sound weird. Correction: it’s just that I’m used to cliches, and X Train / X Car / X Plane / X Ship is heavily cliched and I’m slightly annoyed. Clarification: this is a rant, please ignore.
Meanwhile, Maximus was in the Moonlight Empire, witnessing the first operation of the void trains. - _Hyperion_5mthCommented
Why do you do this? Just call them trains. A train is a train no matter what its made of or what rail it tuns on.
Meanwhile, Maximus was in the Moonlight Empire, witnessing the first operation of the void trains. - _Hyperion_6mthCommentedCh 2528 The Curtains Draw Close! I
- _Hyperion_6mthCommentedCh 2526 Rage Against the Dying Light! IV
- _Hyperion_6mthCommentedCh 2524 Rage Against the Dying Light! II
- _Hyperion_6mthCommentedCh 2522 Obscene Values! VI
- _Hyperion_6mthCommentedCh 2520 Obscene Values! IV
- _Hyperion_6mthCommentedCh 2518 Obscene Values! II
- _Hyperion_6mthCommentedCh 2516 Alexander King's Apexification! IV
- _Hyperion_6mthCommentedCh 2514 Alexander King's Apexification! II
- _Hyperion_7mthCommentedCh 2512 Raising a Dreadful Army! IV