TNT_Subho99
Awesome start those eyes should not be Sharingan though. Kamui is ok but no Susano for her please. Instead make her OP in darkness aspect. Also remember one thing author she is going to be his Harem queen. So no matter what she should be the strongest every time other harem members come (except Mc ) Also Mc not having other powers would not be a good idea . Although mc is strong with VM , rennegan . This power are still not good enough in front of Infinite gem . Unless you seriously introduce them as unbeatable in first fight. Also scarlet witch is a must for marvel harem. And if x men universe is mixed in Marvel Jean grey as well.
Also another thing for god sake donât make him bear humans stupidity if they provoke him. He already lost his parent because of it. If he still let the like of hydra or general Ross dance on his head and do nothing I will drop the novel. The badass personality should be there. Especially his harem queen need to be extremely ruthless . And only in front of mc will she become like a woman in love.
it's only the first chapter and I want to quit. It's written like a play or script which is frankly, awful. Why write a book in the style of a play? Plays have actors to convey the emotion the words don't portray. Books don't have that, so writing a book in a script format is worthless. It's just random words on a screen that mean nothing; something, which readers can't relate to.