Kotario
His nearest neighbor is 20km away, and yet they’re looking on with interest as he walks up to the gate to be greeted by his knights. Those are some fine telescopes his neighbors have. Good thing his blink can reach 500.000m; it can at least jump him down to the next block. Sarcasm aside, you might have a problem with distances in this novel. They just don’t make sense.
"Sarcasm aside" you didn't discribed the city at all. It makes sense what you are saying, just make us readers understand.like cario city is xy km large in diameter, or gold /platinum costs this and that in real life RIGHT NOW but later because inflation it will be much cheaper or the real powers in real life have xyz billions in assats. Logic (non fictional) is NEEDED in fantasy that gives the story sense.i am not saying your story is without logic just we readers don't see it as clearly as you, the writer for obvious reasons. :) so if you say it 20km away ok ,but please discribe how the city funcions with that distances. like magic teleportation circles or wathever because only mc and girlfriend has 'blink' at this point. for example ,other players and common npcs don't ,at least according to you. They use horses ,so traveling even 1 mansion worth of distance (20km) will take really long time,if the horses travel as real life ones if not state it to us to understand please. to write somethig positive this novel is not bad :)