Review Detail of Yadoley in Two Dysfunctional Heroes

Hello, @Yadoley !! Thanks for taking your time to leave a review. I’ll do my best to upload 2-3 chapters a day + bonus chaps depending on my mood, and I hope you can continue to support me. Honestly, I joined WSA–2024, not that I have any hope of winning. After all, it started in January and I just joined now with over four months late already. Anyway, I hope to know what you think about my story and things that needed changing. Were my characters “human” enough? How about the dialogue? Were they realistic enough? You are my first comment so I’ll be sure to screenshot this, print this, and paste it in my journal. Haha. Again, thank you very much!! —Arkira

Hello, thank you very much that you will continue to do this despite the fact that you were a little late to start on time, to be honest, I would add more cute things to your story like jokes, a date or young masters who are messing with his girlfriend and how he is with them straighten out during dates, the main thing is not to focus on them, as if they are nobody in their eyes, I would also add some kind of joke somewhere in the middle of the story that in the future they will be able to get a system of joint travel or something like that, where they should help different worlds, exclude anomalies such as regressors or migrants, although it would be better to add something else for them other than what I said, I just added something similar based on my favorite works, but in any case I respect your taste, I’m just a little tired of all sorts of systems of divine swords or masters of one finger press where the entire universe is in front of him)

Quite honestly, I didn’t expect you to reply at all. This took me by surprise. Haha. Anyway, I am considering your recommendations, especially the joke/comedic parts. I love raw human interactions the most, that’s why. Makes me all giggly and stuff. And speaking of regressors, transmigrators, being isekai’ed, and whatnots… I am absolutely tired of them so it is safe to say that these three wouldn’t pop up in this story at all. No fan service either. And especially no harem. In the first place, this is a high fantasy. To be specific, it is a medieval-inspired world. And I wanted it to be nostalgic with a bit of romanticism here and there. Just a simple story with simple and easy to follow conflicts but with complex characters. This is the goal and I really am nervous if I could even pull this off at all. So wish me luck, I guess? It is getting too long so I’ll cut it short. It is already 9:44 p.m. as I am writing this and I still haven't finished editing chapter 6. I am following the Chekov’s Gun, that’s why. I just hope I finish editing before midnight so I can reach my quota for today. T_T I’ll try to answer if you have any questions at all. Thanks!! —Arkira