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Review Detail of DaoistKgLzCV in The Lost Paradise: The Coming of the God of Death from the Underworld

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DaoistKgLzCV
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3 things I don't like. 1. Mc is way too Gary stu. He is perfect, the best at everything and everyone loves him. 2. The time travel stuff at the beginning was so bad, time travel almost never makes sense in fiction and has plenty of paradoxes and it's the same here. 3. I had to drop it at ch22 where I died of cringe after he got confessed to and his response went something like "I love u too but I need a harem bro please" (I can't remember the exact words cux I've already repressed the memory)

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The Lost Paradise: The Coming of the God of Death from the Underworld

Maya_Matengele

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It wasn't the confession that was cringe, it was the mc's response with the harem stuff. Anyway, can you clarify some of the time travel shenanigans for me? My assumption is that the time travel stuff works like this: Mc decides to go through with his plan, then a version of him goes through with the plan and sends the info back. If that is true, then one version of the mc would flip the notebook to the next page and see nothing, because its his job to go through with it. So then why is the mc super confused when be sees nothing on the page on the 3rd or 4th attempt or whatever it was? Wouldn't he assume first it was his job to go through with the plan and send the info back? Also, if the plan succeeded, why would the guy that succeeded go "hell yeah everything worked on, anyway let's go back in time." Why wouldn't he stay? He already succeeded. Also couldn't he abuse this way more? Like, he knows plan whatever is gonna work, so he writes in his notebook for example: Go through with the plan and then send back the answers to tomorrows test in school. Or something like that, if it works like you showed can't he exploit it endlessly? Also worth mentioning: This might have already been answered in the original, but It's been a pretty long time since I read the original. And personally I think it's the authors job to remind the reader of things so you don't have to read the whole thing again just to understand what's going on.

Maya_Matengele:Too perfect? Gary Stu? I always advise people to read with their eyes open for a reason, you should do the same.. Time paradox? If you read the canon version, then you should know that time paradoxes are prevalent there. Therefore you should expect them in any FF of the novel. That it confuses you is your problem, not the fic's because many others understand them because everything is clearly explained. And cringe? Really? Which confession isn't cringe in hindsight? So you basically gave 2.5 star rating because of preference and your inability to understand what is clearly explained as well as ignoring all the mistakes, faults, and failures the MC had in all the 22 chapters you read and focused on only the successes and you claimed 'Gary Stu and too perfect'? Be honest with me, Is your real name 'Karen' by any chance?
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Too perfect? Gary Stu? I always advise people to read with their eyes open for a reason, you should do the same.. Time paradox? If you read the canon version, then you should know that time paradoxes are prevalent there. Therefore you should expect them in any FF of the novel. That it confuses you is your problem, not the fic's because many others understand them because everything is clearly explained. And cringe? Really? Which confession isn't cringe in hindsight? So you basically gave 2.5 star rating because of preference and your inability to understand what is clearly explained as well as ignoring all the mistakes, faults, and failures the MC had in all the 22 chapters you read and focused on only the successes and you claimed 'Gary Stu and too perfect'? Be honest with me, Is your real name 'Karen' by any chance?